My new story!.....so far?

So yesterday we were making a story that we can make our own theme of the story so we got to write about anything but my story was based in the year 2145 and these space explores that discover new planets that there captain gives them to search on the but something goes wrong.
just saying if you see a name and then two dots that means that person is talking.

but this what I got so far.

Jake:where docking in  3..2..1.. PICH!

Sonny: that was a long ride in spaceship Jake

Jake: yeah man let’s get lunch

Sonny: yeah sure

Captain: explores on deck we’ve  got a mission on the planet titan….

Sonny:okay sir

Jake : Sonny what's the matter!

Sonny: we’ve got a new planet to explore !

Jake:landing in 3..2..1…

CRASH CRESH CRASH

Sonny: This place is a amazing

Jake: a water planet?

Sonny: the water it’s 85% electric we could this water as energy.

Jake: taking some samples

Sonny:WAIT!

BOOOOOOOMMM!!!!!

Jake: what….happen

Sonny:it’s electrical water that well exploded…..

Rrrrrrrrrrrr

Sonny:The planet it’s gonna explode  get to the ship

Brrrrooooooooow wwwwwwww

Jake: RUN!!!!

rumble …. rumble …… sss ppp zzzzzz

Sonny: Get into your seat now

Ffffzfzzzzzzzzeeeeeooooww

Jake: wha….. We made it…..

Sonny: yeah!! We...we… oh no? WARHEADS

Jake: what are warheads

Sonny: specially design in elite space jet combat…

Jake: so run…..

Sonny: yes… but they're not attacking …. There… neutral

Jake: what does that mean?

Sonny: they're friendly or rogue scavengers but there fine.

THE END

FOR NOW